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    dots Submission Name: six:thirty-threedots

    Author: isabella
    Elite Ratio:    5.56 - 803/905/472
    Words: 52
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    birds chase birds.
    bikes go by.
    maples put on lipstick.

    i take my shirt off.
    sip beer.
    read four paragraphs

    and start thinking about how
    it's seventy-some-degrees-out.
    it's seventy-some-degrees-out

    and sun feels longer going down.

    Submitted on 2012-03-24 19:16:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You had me at "i take my shirt off"

    | Posted on 2012-11-20 00:00:00 | by Vancrown | [ Reply to This ]
      "and start thinking about how
    it's seventy-some-degrees-out.
    it's seventy-some-degrees-out

    and sun feels longer going down. "

    This gets all mixed up in my head and for that i love it. I particularly love the little things. The way "It's seventy-some degrees out" is repeated in the same strophe but the first one gets a period so that the long pause between the last two lines literally stretches out and makes it feel longer at the end. And then the going down with the sip of beer going down as well marries nicely.

    And of course the obvious,who couldn't love maples putting on lipstick.

    a bear putting on lipstick would be scary though.

    like i said, it gets all mixed up. And yes I'm working from home today. Whooo

    | Posted on 2012-05-11 00:00:00 | by lukewarm | [ Reply to This ]
      The sun is longer, and it's about time too. I am transported to my back yard, beer in hand watching the sky, the birds, the bugs flying around. This is definitely Spring and half my garden is in the ground. But it's really the clear-sky nights that have been special... no, on second thought it's each minute that goes by.
    | Posted on 2012-03-26 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      i like
    "maples put on lipstick/ i take my shirt off"

    nature robes itself, we disrobe...

    the sun is rising higher, and warmer.

    "all things almost being"

    well, almost.
    | Posted on 2012-03-24 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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