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    dots Submission Name: Our chance.. Our butterflydots
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    Author: Eadyzgal
    ASL Info:    19/Female/Northants
    Elite Ratio:    0.19 - 0/1/4
    Words: 154
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
    Total Views: 263
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 873



    Description:
       When I had my scan for our little boy ( after losing 4 babies) to see a baby fluttering around on that screen with a heartbeat it was an amazing feeling x


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    dotsOur chance.. Our butterflydots
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    What should of been a minute felt like days,

    I saw two lines before me and sat there in a gaze,

    I rubbed my belly softly and called out his name,

    I knew when he hugged me he felt the same,

    I took them endlessly just to see those lines again,

    It was real joy and no more pain,

    We saw your body before us on the screen that day,

    Your tiny heart beating and you wriggling away,

    A smile was on our faces permanently planted on,

    Were really gonna be a family full of love from day one,

    I feel you inside me as you flutter by,

    You are our little angel our very own butterfly,

    Your our chance and for that we are glad,

    We cant wait to hold you and be your mum and dad!





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