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    dots Submission Name: Tears Of The Moondots

    Author: LadyInRed88
    ASL Info:    19/f/MO
    Elite Ratio:    3.68 - 131/180/32
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsTears Of The Moondots

    The moon is softly crying-
    Its tears pour down from a blackened sky...
    Tears with silver dreams painted upon them-
    Tears that sparkle in your eyes...

    Those same eyes that hold my heaven-
    In their thundering, swirling blue...
    O' I never asked for blessings to pour down on me,
    But in the summer rain I was given you...

    To roll down my quivering lips,
    Like the sweetest strawberry wine...
    To cleanse my soul clean of the Devil-
    And beautify my withered mind...

    So even when my soul is among the vultures,
    Underneath a blood red sun...
    Or I'm racing the fires of Hell,
    And my legs refuse to run...

    O' when I see the broken shadows,
    Dance across your amber skin...
    I'll still taste the tears that hold my wishes-
    Rain down from the sky again...

    Submitted on 2004-08-01 23:34:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I don't like the "O's" and I think maybe you could pick another type of wine, for originality, but other than that, this piece is very pretty and well written. I'd love to be written about in this manner. I love stanzas 3 and 4. Very nice (and sweet) write
    | Posted on 2004-08-02 00:00:00 | by nicelyJ | [ Reply to This ]
      it was cute so to mention well wrtten, not needed to mention..
    the emotion protaryed and the compariosn with the moon is with that os significant greek myth. hhehe
    it was just nice to read.. cute real cute.. just as cute as you are...
    | Posted on 2004-08-02 00:00:00 | by rawpot | [ Reply to This ]
      it seems like a very desperate person wrote this... how much did you hire this professional? (that was a very shreud compliment.)
    | Posted on 2004-08-01 00:00:00 | by WD20x2 | [ Reply to This ]
      So rain is a rather reflective event for you? Or maybe the poem has nothing to do with you...no description so how can I tell?
    What can I say? It was lovely! But its been done to death and back again before...but a new romantic read is always nice to see.
    | Posted on 2004-08-01 00:00:00 | by MyX | [ Reply to This ]

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