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    dots Submission Name: Forgetting you was easierdots
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    Author: Dark Dann
    ASL Info:    18/ Male/ San Diego
    Elite Ratio:    6.44 - 78/67/53
    Words: 230
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsForgetting you was easierdots
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    Maybe it's all in my mind
    Such a place filled with lies
    and memories that haunt it
    Places filled with dark and light

    And when I look back
    I can't see a thing
    Memories were never easier
    To erase like flying to the moon
    Soaring across the night sky
    Seeing cars fly
    Yeah, I can forget about you.

    Because time flies in a different sense
    For me, I guess.
    Moments pass by
    And I can live without you
    Seconds seem like forever
    ( But I can live without you)
    And months seem like decades
    Time seems to end
    And yet, I can't live without you?

    Do you remember the first kiss?
    Do my lips, you ever miss?

    Silence; remember the night we shared?
    The stars shone bright
    But your eyes
    Shone brighter than any star
    And from that day on;
    You seemed to get far
    Away from my reach

    You feel like a million miles away
    Like a different galaxy
    Like a different universe
    You soared across the stars
    Away from it all.

    Because forgetting you was as easy
    As pigs learning to fly.
    Turtles growing wings
    Men living under the sea.
    all those things are easier
    Than forgetting about you.

    Because trying to forget about you
    Is like trying to erase
    Ever meeting you
    And that I can never let go.




    Submitted on 2012-03-26 20:23:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i like the inner battle...the voices arguing...can i forget you? i will forget you? then i can't forget you...

    we want to let go, but we can't...

    should be "memories were never easier" in second stanza.

    hard to erase the pain. it stays with us, etched within us.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-03-27 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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