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    dots Submission Name: Mommies Love dots
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    Author: DearlyDeparted
    Elite Ratio:    3.33 - 211/290/189
    Words: 155
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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       Been pondering about the type of parent I want to be to my soon to be child.


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    dotsMommies Love dots
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    My only hope is that you learn to trust me.
    To feel comfortable enough to tell me everything.
    With out fear of judgement.
    For I will never strike you down in your time of need.
    If it's an ear you need, a sound board to bounce thoughts off of;
    Then I am it.
    My understanding wisdom will never falter from showing you the right paths.
    Though I'll be strong enough to allow you to make you're own ways.
    Just as I have.
    Mistakes are inevitable and I'll never be the one shoving them in your face.
    Yet I'll be there to show you how to make up for it and where you went wrong.
    Ignorance will not be my lesson, fear shall never be a tool used against you.
    Word shall be my whip to get you in shape.
    Nothing harsh to sting,
    But always calm and soft.
    A mother's love that forever rings.




    Submitted on 2012-03-27 07:58:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Congratulations on your almost new addition!
    As far as the poem goes, I enjoyed it, it seemed like free form thoughts that you wanted to get out on paper, which has a nice raw quality to it. It makes the poem very relatable.
    Your cadence was a bit off, and I felt the structure was a bit confusing at times, however other than that, it was a great write :)
    | Posted on 2012-03-28 00:00:00 | by DiamondTears | [ Reply to This ]


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