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    dots Submission Name: Drawndots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 146
    Class/Type: Fanfic/Dark
    Total Views: 507
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 901



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       It never was much of a home, this darkness. However, it is the only home I have ever known... How does one let go of that!?
    I WANT TO!!!


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    dotsDrawndots
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    This familiarized darkness, has found me.
    I knew it were only a matter of time.

    Now here come the memories
    as the pain seeps in with them,
    My body trembles, literally moved by the pain
    this deep seeded pain that constantly follows
    may as well be a black cloud
    I certainly feel as such.

    Falling deeper within the darkness
    Drawn into this cold empty space
    I write to help keep myself afloat..

    Yet it isn't want it once was,
    I can only crawl with bruised,cut, and bleeding body for so long

    I look back, My name is being called...
    ... Drawn into this cold empty space...

    Running does me no good,
    I am to blame for this depression
    I am at fault for the lonely nights I rock myself asleep, for..
    I am, drawn into this cold empty space




    Submitted on 2012-03-28 02:19:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Jakie
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    You are so not to blame!! The people who were supposed to protect you to shield you and keep you safe failed you!! That is NOT YOUR FAULT!! you have to let then carry that burden.. And stop taking it for them...
    Dont give in to that darkness.... it overwhelms and it kills.

    Heather

    I won't be writing or posting anymore. But I will still be here reading and listening.. You know how to reach me anytime
    | Posted on 2012-03-31 00:00:00 | by trynfinity | [ Reply to This ]


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