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    dots Submission Name: Albatrossdots
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    Author: Glen Bowman
    ASL Info:    70 m Oz
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 1140/307/186
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       Penned for a family gathering my tribe had one year. We used to be British expats around the Pacific islands, now we live all over Australia. The albatross, several species, fly vast distances but go home to breed sometimes; the home is usually some lost islet in the ocean ... We used to meet the albatross when they followed our ships, soaring two metres above the stern for day after day. huge birds ... Nature is full of romance!


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    We're away seeing lightning falling,
    waterspouts' wailing hearing,
    being the dying and living
    ocean's and sky's flying,

    And our joy's no homeland,
    our home need no stay:
    we can find our island
    only in time to meet
    with waymakers white and grey
    gathered for farewell

    Where stands to the swell
    our wingless stone so strong,
    where it waited so long
    to be sharp at our feet.




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      Very subdued, somewhat melancholy. For some reason, I loved that there was no rhyme scheme, despite the presence of rhymes. Normally that sort of thing bothers me, but it worked well here.
    | Posted on 2012-04-04 00:00:00 | by saartha | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really beautiful. It felt peaceful, but sad at the same time. I had to read it more than once to try to understand it, but I think good poems are like that, they make you think. It provided an interesting perspective, thanks for the read.
    | Posted on 2012-03-30 00:00:00 | by dancer-of-words | [ Reply to This ]
      life becomes clear just at the end...otherwise we are being jostled around on stormy seas and the island just keeps looking farther and farther away all the time...almost within reach, then not, almost within reach, then not.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-03-29 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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