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What To Call You..


Author: DearlyDeparted
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Words: 133
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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What To Call You..



I've grown so weary of this mask you've all applied.
Sick and tired of trying on disguise after disguise.
It's due time we let this porcelain rise.
Let my skin breath anew.
For hiding behind what you want me to be isn't going to do.
Your pleasure has lost a place in my gain.
Attempts at keeping you all happy has only driven me insane.
Though you're not the only one to blame.
I shouldn't have been so unrealistic.
To think that all this bullshit, I could just fix it.
Watch as I shatter this glass;
Along with all my fears.
Get ready for the tears.
All the ones I never shed these past nine years.
You want real;
Rip off those security blankets.
See just how the blistering cold can feel.




Submitted on 2012-03-29 20:42:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I liked it except for the last two lines, just feel out of place but all in all good. I love the way it begins and the line "It's due time we let this porcelain rise." thats a scary feeling, like a lifeless Pocelain smile stretching out!! Agh!! lol -09
| Posted on 2012-04-10 00:00:00 | by Damien Vladimir | [ Reply to This ]


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