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    dots Submission Name: Sacrificedots
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    Author: keestu
    ASL Info:    32/male/Sydney
    Elite Ratio:    5.61 - 153/95/116
    Words: 217
    Class/Type: Poetry/Sorry
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    Description:
       Ten reasons of death

    1. Old age
    2. Wrath
    3. solitude
    4. Emptiness
    5. Despair
    6. Destruction
    7. Intoxication
    8. Insanity
    9. Greed
    10. Sacrifice

    Tenth -- Sacrifice
    Finally I reach my deadline and my final thoughts before settling down to an endless demise. I look back at myself drowning my happiness in dark waters and walking the path that i never wanted to.


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    I thought she would hold my hand...
    I hoped she would hug my cry...
    I smiled like a fool to see that she never existed.

    Happiness I see you over there,
    drowning in your own tears.
    The other nine stood there beside you
    reminding of how fake on you is the hope that bears.

    You fight again with me in that same false hope,
    of finding the one that never exists.
    You smile with a tear and look at all,
    of whom they do not have a tear to dry.

    So did I drown you in those dark waters,
    of my heart thinking that the pain will go away.
    But you yet rise and ask,
    Why is it that you are still alive?

    I walk thy by side,
    looking at nothing but the truth,
    For I have left all of you to haunt,
    this heart of mine till I die.

    I'll tell you the truth....

    I am a freak among normal people around me as they claim.
    I am a speck in this tiny world large enough to endure all the pain.
    I long for love that never existed since I was a child.
    I find myself on a road never once again in a while and for the last time......alone....




    Submitted on 2012-03-30 22:29:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like it :) .. you seem to do a similar thing that I do and that is have a skeleton to work with and then add the accesssries and body along the way.. it gives a finished shine... I enjoy poems (and songs) that speak of opposites, in this case a form of happiness whit h ended in sadness.. there's something about comparing 'deatg' and 'life's or ' boy's andy ' girl' that appeals to me. To find a love that never existed as a child, is my favorite line.. I do hope that you find it someday.. good luck to you and beautiful words!
    | Posted on 2012-03-31 00:00:00 | by dannyshyboy | [ Reply to This ]
      Not a very good poem I'll say it myself...but wanted to express the path as a sacrifice I make in life...either way...the last reason of my death....sacrifice..(Sacrifice happiness to get everything else)
    | Posted on 2012-03-30 00:00:00 | by keestu | [ Reply to This ]


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