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    dots Submission Name: colorsdots

    Author: crashley
    Elite Ratio:    0.43 - 3/26/100
    Words: 170
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    free bird, blue sky.
    remember the mighty dead, and just maybe
    you will be granted a piece of who they were.

    celebration of life and renouncement of the past gone by,
    we grin and grin and with fairy footsteps she lingers in the garden of the Gods.

    tip-toe through springy moss and the musky smell of flowers mingling with dirt;
    the sun dapples the green of the earth and makes it flourish in yellow light.
    the ivy grows in free-form tendrils.
    the clover is thick underfoot.

    white eyelit dresses lift in the breeze and copper skin glows with the sheen of sweet sweat and she trembles and shakes from the very /thought/ of being alive.
    orange pink hue of her nail-beds grows multi-colored from the lilac pollen and mucky roots and white teeth flash in a grin.
    tipped corners on the lips, self-satisfaction that lacks contempt and arrogance
    replacement and enlightened, there is no need for the milky white expanse of a detached mind

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      there is something about colors. i think, at least. it's as if somehow, in the color of things, things don't seem as heavy. ya know?

    and that's how i feel about this write. it's not heavy.

    i think too, the remembrance thing going on... to be granted any piece of someone or some part of someone... to be able to incorporate or add a little bit of their perception into your own is a thing indeed.

    'self-satisfaction that lacks contempt and arrogance'

    i love this line. simply because, i think sometimes, just sometimes, there is nothing wrong with self-satisfaction, especially if it lacks both contempt and arrogance. i suppose it comes down to how one gets there.


    just thought i'd leave a few thoughts.

    i really do like this.

    | Posted on 2012-04-01 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]

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