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    dots Submission Name: A conversation with my heartdots

    Author: AbsolutelyLost
    ASL Info:    27/M/India
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 54/41/33
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsA conversation with my heartdots

    One day I met a girl whom I thought would've been better to stay away from,
    For my fragile heart could not bear another attachment.

    It was reluctant to approach, yet beat without retrospect.

    It vibrated again when she spoke and made me realize,
    That there is still some good, and it is better to break free.

    But hark my stupid lil heart doesnt understand,
    That there is never a start,
    And that there is no stop,
    That it is no sweet love story,
    And it is just a stupid unspoken reality,
    That it is to break, and
    Feel marooned once again.

    Submitted on 2012-04-01 12:32:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      A conversation I can surely relate to. Yet I must say I'm not so nice. It's never easy to just give into something that hasn't worked since you've started. Though how can one be sure that it won't ever work if you don't try. Which is in fact the reason may of us continue to suffer, hope. -.- Indeed a good write.
    | Posted on 2012-04-07 00:00:00 | by DearlyDeparted | [ Reply to This ]

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