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    dots Submission Name: A Moonless Nightdots
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    Author: metallichick786
    ASL Info:    26/f/Cali
    Elite Ratio:    2.79 - 78/85/51
    Words: 134
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsA Moonless Nightdots
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    Pondering in a space less illusion, I find myself
    The silence comforts me still, as does the pain
    My feet gently sink into a moss muddy ground
    And I peer into a stream that runs crimson

    Sheets of tears sting my frozen face
    I effortlessly mourn for you
    Your absence haunts me to my core
    I can't even seem to function alone

    The woods grow dark, and the water black
    At this time I suppose I should part
    So I turn around to be alarmed
    you stand behind me, gently cupping my heart

    "You're dead," I whisper as I look in your eyes
    An empty void so vexing stares back
    No reply, just a deafening silence
    And in that moment you disappear into mist

    Insanity sweeps over me




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      The ghost of lost love is persistent and tenacious; it haunts the mind and the heart constantly...

    you have done a great job of poetically describing the grip of mourning and loss..

    the heaviness of grief is a force here, and you make the reader feel the weight of it.

    Very good work!
    | Posted on 2012-04-05 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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