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    dots Submission Name: Fuck itdots
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    Author: cyberpoet
    ASL Info:    21/Male/Wisconsin
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 28/18/22
    Words: 37
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsFuck itdots
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    You told me you weren't like the other's. You told me to trust you and I did. There was never anything to begin with Now my concience is finally kicking in At a tale I already know. It was all lies.




    Submitted on 2012-04-07 01:28:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Grammar/spelling issues: other's = others. Tale a = Tale I. Concience = conscience.

    Though, did you really mean 'conscience'? As in, your sense of morality? Because it doesn't really make sense in this situation. Perhaps you meant 'consciousness'.

    The lack of any sort of poetic technique in this is off-putting, and makes for a dull read. There's little here to critique, it reads more like a kid's diary than a poem. The message is shallow, and the writing is unimaginative. What was your intent while writing this?



    | Posted on 2012-04-07 00:00:00 | by saartha | [ Reply to This ]


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