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    dots Submission Name: A Tumultuous Journeydots

    Author: Cyntia
    ASL Info:    31
    Elite Ratio:    5.19 - 51/57/32
    Words: 191
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsA Tumultuous Journeydots

    She slowly opens her eyes;
    attempting to adjust to the lack of light.
    Stumbling forward as equilibrium disappears,
    her hands reach out; desperate to rest
    upon sturdy ground.

    Blood boiling; fists clenched;
    she picks herself up stomping
    an angry foot against the jagged surface.
    Crashing through the weakened floorboards,
    her encumbrances plummet into
    the turbulent waves.

    Tumultuous currents drag
    her body under its chaotic blanket
    as she fights to stay afloat.
    The undercurrents encircling
    her arms and legs; gently coaxing
    her surrender. Despondence filling
    her lungs; her heart releases
    giving way to the gravitational pull
    of the dexterous waves.

    As her feet caresses the soft sand;
    she finally opens to the tender touch
    of the compassionate nature flowing
    through a multitude of scars; once hidden
    from the world; now open to the salt
    in the sea. A promise to heal
    from the very foundation
    from which they were erected.

    Her tears mix with the sea
    as she finally experiences
    the depth of her pain. Light shines
    through the soothing waves; bringing peace
    and faith to the vulnerable being.

    Submitted on 2012-04-13 10:23:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow...this is a rebirth.

    when the salt of the ocean does not hurt the open wounds...there has been healing.

    but what a tough process...from almost drowning to just barely getting your head above water...to finally feeling the sand under your feet...being able to walk tall...out from the tumultuous waves of the past...into a future of soft beach and love.

    | Posted on 2012-04-14 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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