Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: build up or break downdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: darkonesgirl
    ASL Info:    21/f/sc
    Elite Ratio:    3.32 - 233/245/125
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 432
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 581



    Description:
       For a special guy he's one of the good ones


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsbuild up or break downdots
    -------------------------------------------


    What would it feel like
    To have those kisses daily
    To see you smile
    Because your happy
    To give you what you want
    How would the relationship work
    For two people
    Who always helps others
    You have your way
    And I have mine
    Have you ever been happy?
    Maybe I can help you
    Even if it means
    You stay with her
    Life is so cruel at times
    So what to do?
    Help you build up
    What you got
    Or be the cause
    to bring it down
    Which way will
    You be happy?




    Submitted on 2012-04-13 13:03:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    194881

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    The Curtain Call written by faideddarkness
    The Human Harmonic written by Daniel Barlow
    Relentless. The Visceral Fracture. written by Daniel Barlow
    Not the Devil, but the Wind written by endlessgame23
    The Abyss of Love written by poetotoe
    Ciggarettes written by Poetic_tragedy6
    Keep written by TheStillSilence
    A bit of Pain written by teika5
    Twin Intercept written by Daniel Barlow
    In a Corner written by jeniecel
    Beauty Rest written by jackz
    None the Wiser written by endlessgame23
    The Poems Death written by Mepoduo
    Night- time written by Daniel Barlow
    Across the bed written by expiring_touch
    going,,,"Skin." written by teika5
    // Seasonal Song written by ShadowParadox
    Snippet written by Daniel Barlow
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth written by endlessgame23
    Day 6 written by TheStillSilence
    Live In Between written by teika5
    Honeymoon written by TheStillSilence
    Reliquary of Writ written by HisNameIsNoMore
    The World written by jjd
    (Untitled Song) written by TeslaKoyal
    Adoration written by TheStillSilence
    Deep written by Janesaddiction
    Vortex: The Imagination That Is written by KeeperOfLight
    When Sirens Whisper written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Mystery Read written by kyserin

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry