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    dots Submission Name: build up or break downdots
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    Author: darkonesgirl
    ASL Info:    21/f/sc
    Elite Ratio:    3.32 - 233/245/125
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 449
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    Bytes: 581



    Description:
       For a special guy he's one of the good ones


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    dotsbuild up or break downdots
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    What would it feel like
    To have those kisses daily
    To see you smile
    Because your happy
    To give you what you want
    How would the relationship work
    For two people
    Who always helps others
    You have your way
    And I have mine
    Have you ever been happy?
    Maybe I can help you
    Even if it means
    You stay with her
    Life is so cruel at times
    So what to do?
    Help you build up
    What you got
    Or be the cause
    to bring it down
    Which way will
    You be happy?




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