Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: What I Know.dots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: eggshells
    ASL Info:    23/M/WA
    Elite Ratio:    3.19 - 29/75/68
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 576
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 859



    Description:
       I am at a change in my life, I suppose and this kindly describes the way I have lived these past few years.


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsWhat I Know.dots
    -------------------------------------------


    I only know what I've
    Read,
    Seen,
    Been told.

    So therefore,
    I don't know
    What I don't know.

    I like to lie.
    I don't know why.

    It seems to give me
    A false sense of
    Honor,
    Decency,
    Pride.

    I suppose,
    I want to see the looks
    Spread upon their faces.
    It seems almost as if they
    Are giving me their graces.
    Telling things
    I've never done.
    I feel like a winner,
    Who has never won.

    After all those feelings have faded,
    I am left with nothing
    And I don't know what to do.

    I'm always after what my parents hated.
    I don't recommend lying.
    It really eats up inside of you.





    Submitted on 2012-04-13 19:44:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      This does have a good message and reminds me of someone in particular out of my past. I think it was half a fantasy thing and the other half a control thing. Except for the lies it might have lasted, would have lasted, but at some point one gives up.
    | Posted on 2012-04-14 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      at times i would like to see stronger wording in this...but love the idea.

    we always know less than we think we know...and the more we learn, the more we understand that we have so much more to learn...

    might play with the language a bit...some of the rhyming seems contrived...as if the phrasing were manipulated a bit too much...

    really like the second stanza...and "i feel like a winner who has never won"

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-04-13 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    194884

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Beauty Rest written by jackz
    Deep written by Janesaddiction
    The Human Harmonic written by Daniel Barlow
    Twin Intercept written by Daniel Barlow
    Honeymoon written by TheStillSilence
    None the Wiser written by endlessgame23
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth written by endlessgame23
    Vortex: The Imagination That Is written by KeeperOfLight
    A Worsening Effect written by Daniel Barlow
    The Poems Death written by Mepoduo
    Things They (Don't) Say written by TheStillSilence
    Johnny's Cock written by endlessgame23
    Live In Between written by teika5
    Meaningless Meanings written by ForgottenGraves
    Hyle written by endlessgame23
    Untitled written by Daniel Barlow
    Sword in the Water written by Wolfwatching
    no sky on the other side written by teika5
    Reliquary of Writ written by HisNameIsNoMore
    A bit of Pain written by teika5
    Verse: written by Daniel Barlow
    (Untitled Song) written by TeslaKoyal
    To the Artist written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Lost Inside the Race written by ForgottenGraves
    Relentless. The Visceral Fracture. written by Daniel Barlow
    Night- time written by Daniel Barlow
    going,,,"Skin." written by teika5
    The World written by jjd
    Adoration written by TheStillSilence
    Florida's Autumn Solstice written by closetpoet

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry