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    dots Submission Name: Wild Forget-me-notsdots

    Author: simpleandgreen
    Elite Ratio:    1.8 - 39/141/136
    Words: 175
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsWild Forget-me-notsdots

    I remember back when we weíre young by the creek.
    Sporting that breezy, white cotton shirt
    I loved so much.
    It billowed in the wind
    With a careless ease, similar to how we were
    That summer. Running, laughing, smiling,
    Sauntering through forest, seeking refuge
    Between shadows, from the restless sun that
    Still managed to peek through the dense branches,
    And lush green leaves.
    Itís sly rays shine in our faces as you gave me
    My first kiss.
    Creeks danced by, crystal lights reflected
    In our eyes. We dipped our hands in the cool water
    To try extinguishing a passion that scared us, yet lured us
    In at the same time.
    Didnít really work.
    Oh youth.
    Time stopped, the world stopped.
    Our smoky, pungent secrets, still hidden from one another,
    Reduced into something sweeter, like the scent of
    Ripe bark, baking in the incandescent sun. Or of those
    Multitude of wild forget-me-nots you gathered, bearing a secret promise
    I still keep to this day.
    I never forgot you.

    Submitted on 2012-04-13 20:07:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I read this and it speaks to me more than I can ever imagine. I have experience feeling like this and I'm glad you wrote this,just couldn't find the right wprds to do so. Somewhere in our lives there are promises we keep for a very long time and our belief that it will be fulfilled someday.The details are so great it paints the picture very well. Thank you for sharing this.
    | Posted on 2012-08-28 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]
      "Itís sly rays shine in our faces as you gave me
    My first kiss."

    I'm not sure why I like this line so much, but it flows in a manner that I typically admire. It's probably the least likely line to need any deciphering. But like I said, it's a great line. I also enjoy the imagery of this piece.
    | Posted on 2012-04-14 00:00:00 | by OlMrTerrible | [ Reply to This ]

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