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    dots Submission Name: Good Reasonsdots
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    Author: eggshells
    ASL Info:    23/M/WA
    Elite Ratio:    3.19 - 29/75/68
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsGood Reasonsdots
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    My soul is just shot.
    My heart is committing treason.
    Why won't my memory rot?
    So I keep telling myself,
    I left you for many reasons.

    Every single day was like a riddle,
    Just to find out your mood.
    Well I couldn't cope and I won't fiddle,
    With something so silly as rotten food.

    You played too many games,
    And it seems I lost my rule book,
    To every single one.
    I asked you to see if my heart was broken,
    and you wouldn't even look.


    I left you for many reasons.
    Why won't my memory rot?
    My heart is committing treason.
    My mind is just shot.
    Because I love you even though,
    it was for good reasons.




    Submitted on 2012-04-13 20:17:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I agree with the previous two comments. I like the poem! Repetitions and refrains used so evocatively.
    | Posted on 2012-04-16 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the pattern with this, it carries us along well. Good work.
    | Posted on 2012-04-14 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      Very straight forward and full of truth. Also very beautiful in its truthfulness. I know I have felt this way myself at times, wondering why my heart still longed for something or someone after I was gone. Especially since my mind knew that I had done what was best. I think that is the core of human nature, to love despite. Very nicely written.
    | Posted on 2012-04-13 00:00:00 | by Maskannai | [ Reply to This ]


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