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    dots Submission Name: I dare not ruin her elegance with pruningdots

    Author: OlMrTerrible
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    dotsI dare not ruin her elegance with pruningdots

    A rose amongst dandelions, her dew covered petals brought feel to my waking limbs.

    She breathed life into my lungs, like bellows closed in a rush to clinch.

    Her stem smooth and elegant with twisting razor sharp thorns that warn, you can look but not touch.

    "I dare not ruin her elegance with pruning. "

    Congregations of virgin leaves forming at her ends, I am astounded by this rose amongst dandelions, I am in love.

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