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    dots Submission Name: Colour My Worlddots

    Author: Blue Monk
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 1547/457/118
    Words: 37
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsColour My Worlddots

    Yo Kaida, Esperith
    this page is blank
    while Bast rests in her jar
    take it and run far
    to the mountain top that was Eve
    and make the offering
    it is time
    to colour my world

    Submitted on 2012-04-15 08:21:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Feels like a muse poem. When there's a desire to write but the words hide out. I love the mythical, kind of Old Testament feeling of the poem. It's a creative way to spur on creativity and in its own way hearkens back to the beginning of all creativity. Enjoyable poem.
    | Posted on 2015-04-24 00:00:00 | by emwren | [ Reply to This ]
      -Mythical, Enchanted, Eccentric. I like the mythical feel to this, because of the -Yo Kaida, Esperith- -Bast- -Eve- Just something about seems so myth-threaded to me. I say Enchanted; the three last lines about the offering and coloring your world. Eccentric; it has that surreal airness that I simply adore- Yes it is nice to have our own little personal world filled with color, instead of it being dull and plain. Color bring adventure, excitement... trouble- Very interesting piece..

    | Posted on 2012-05-08 00:00:00 | by TangledInDreams | [ Reply to This ]
      colour, eh? I like the phrase 'color my world'...I'm curious why you chose the brits' spelling though...

    I read this as a prayer of sorts...
    to the muse of poets, or some other female goddess of creation/creativity...
    and this idea grows from the blank page and 'colour my world'...inspiration striking is a bit like being color blind, then being surrounded by Technicolor vistas upon the next blink of your eye...

    what type of offering does one give a muse? I may need to make an offering of my own...

    | Posted on 2012-04-20 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]
    While I am not entirely sure what "yo kaida, esperith" is referring to, this poem has a unique energy to it. Even though it is short, there is this build up to it that's very appealing. I can't quite put my finger on why, precisely, which makes me enjoy it all the more. I assume Bast is in reference to the Egyptian goddess. The accumulating images that this brings to mind is bordering on absurd -- but I don't mean that in a bad way, but rather that there's some kind of magic to it that transcends logic (Bast, Eve, etc), and also that inevitably prophetic "it is time".

    Yes it is time.

    I love the line "to the mountain top that was Eve". A bit of a rambley non-comment.

    | Posted on 2012-04-15 00:00:00 | by Lady of Shalott | [ Reply to This ]

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