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    dots Submission Name: walking awaydots
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    Author: darkonesgirl
    ASL Info:    21/f/sc
    Elite Ratio:    3.32 - 233/245/125
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 434
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 571



    Description:
       Once again to a really good guy just one that doesn't belong to me life sucks sometimes


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    dotswalking awaydots
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    My lips are still soft
    From your kisses
    my body still sore
    From your unfamiliar embrace
    My bed still holds
    the smell and memories of you
    And my heart is still shattered
    From walking away
    Tears streaming down
    Anguish controls/fills the heart
    Frustrations taken
    On a piece of paper
    Not quite the same
    As screaming
    Too passionate
    For my own good
    I let myself feel to easily
    My feelings
    Are my own to bare
    so don't ask
    I wont tell




    Submitted on 2012-04-16 22:17:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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