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Author: DiamondTears
ASL Info:    20/F/Wa
Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 66 /109 /57
Words: 59
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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I found you, 
Fingers reaching in the dark,
And my soul will embark,
To travel in black,
Will you meet me half way,
Pick up the slack?

Am I insecure, or intuitive?
Your heart shy and elusive. 
I reach for your light,
While wondering, am I right?
I spill my guts on the table,
Unlock yours? Completely unable.

Submitted on 2012-04-17 00:30:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Dam that speaks volumes to me i can relate so much emotion! I love this post!!! KUDOS

| Posted on 2012-04-17 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]

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