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    dots Submission Name: The Initiatedots

    Author: Blue Monk
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 1556/457/118
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThe Initiatedots

    live and shifting, left and right
    along the hallway path
    the red and warm
    the blue and cool
    of softly glowing light

    betwixt these banks of motes surreal
    two kin which cannot meet
    one spectrum low
    one spectrum high
    each with its own appeal

    to claim their part of what's foretold
    a truce is made of sorts
    as one for all
    and all for one
    embody prophet bold

    Submitted on 2012-04-18 00:02:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      So, to the mystic initiate it is not all balance, eh grasshoppa?

    ...the key is not to balance the spectrum; navigating the banks with care...
    the key is to become a reverse prism...unifying the shattered spectrum into white light...

    An enlightening poem, Lloyd! Thanks for posting.
    | Posted on 2012-05-06 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]
      Interesting write! It was a bit choppy, so I read it backwards, bottom to top and it flowed more clearly. Try it.
    | Posted on 2012-04-27 00:00:00 | by lynn7 | [ Reply to This ]
      i don't know if Glen is correct in his assumption...but if so...i will be thinking of this poem tomorrow, regardless...as i am wheeled tot he operating room..

    at least i have something poetic to think about, lloyd, so thanks..

    i hope i have some truce with the anesthesia.

    i do see the juxtapostion of heaven and hell here also...

    and it feels as if so many decisions in life border on which way the gurney will be steered, and we are in control most times as to which way we are headed.

    tomorrow, i won't be.

    | Posted on 2012-04-19 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      Is that about the coloured lines on the floor in some hospitals?

    That's what I saw as soon as I read "Hallway" ...

    When I meet readers like me, I punch them out.
    | Posted on 2012-04-19 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]

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