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it's all about understanding the static in the background...



Submitted on 2012-04-18 16:15:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Glenn is correct; your writing definitely has calligraphic beauty.

I actually took a screen shot of this ages ago, so my copy is not messed up like the current edition !
Odd that my seagull photo from the 'bucket' looks as good as when first posted in 2012.

There are a fair number of seagulls here on the Omani coast, but instead an alarming number of pigeons seem to have either descended on the sultanate or have bred so rapidly that nobody took to actually noticing whilst worrying about their own problems.

I didn't think I would see any seagulls in Chorley, but was pleasantly surprised one stormy day last vacation, to find several on the water in Astley Park!

Considering that I currently live a stone's throw from the ocean, it saddens me that I don't hear the sounds of gulls.
(when I was a child, we spent many summer holidays with our great aunt in Rhyl. I used to love waking up, especially on the first morning,to the sound of sea gulls ... I knew I was 'at the seaside !'

I live in Al Khoud, where the wadi opens into the Indian Ocean.
I had a beautiful sunbird's nest in my bougainvillea last year and some scruffy dove's nests also, but this year the Indian Mynah birds have moved into the gardens around my villa and they are pretty nasty to the local birds.

I love your gulls !

| Posted on 2020-08-24 00:00:00 | by Alter idem | [ Reply to This ]
   In your reply to my “America the Beautiful”, in your alarm you conjure up, your poison pills as proscribed in ObamaCare’s Death Panels coined by Sarah Palin and in Obama’s own words take the pills and die (all you old and infirmed).

My patriotic rant you so deplore, explains your mental condition that is absent in your reasoning and heretic brewed reply, you so apply state as my vilification.

In your claim to “empathize” and my lack of balance, you yourself are guilty of disrespect not to empathize America, with a capital “A” that proves to me you’re not American, but a terrorist and un-American. Maybe even a Muslim yourself?

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You and your title as Senior Management at Pleasant View Nursing Home, is a sad commentary of the abyss of America’s liberal education system of which you portray.
| Posted on 2012-10-22 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
  Ah, it's nice to come home to familiar faces and new sprinkles of creativity. I have no critique, because I'm just so glad to have found you amongst the endless feed of unfinished first attempts. *cheers* to the gulls. :)
| Posted on 2012-06-06 00:00:00 | by blueorchids | [ Reply to This ]
  This is good keith, I like the way the rhymes are easy and laboured (if that makes any sense).

a lot of times a poem is ruined by the poet using close rhyme like that, the phrasing is rushed or padded, the rhyming making little sense,

here the use of meter or rhythm and the use of rhyme is a preciseness as a device, it asks the reader to slow down and make the connection, for whatever reason that works and there is
considerable charm,
in this, as a life message, as much as a poem.

I laugh too, I can't imagine having a journal like that
with word perfect poems, what i imagine is more of a cluster fark with scratched out scribblings and pages ripped out. And so, I like that too, the thought of a book of knowledge and how each person's experience cannot be rushed.
| Posted on 2012-04-29 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]
I'm not sure if I ever told you that I have an affinity for Jonathan Livingston Seagull. I have the book as well as the telling of it on vinyl (narrated by Richard Harris). It's surreal to listen to:

Not the best recording of a recording.

Seagulls rising beyond / being the ultimate seagull they can be aside, the interactions in this are lovely and all-encompassing; they are all connected in small and seamless ways that make us realize we are all travelers, yes, and guests wherever we go. Good reminders.

| Posted on 2012-04-19 00:00:00 | by Lady of Shalott | [ Reply to This ]
  sometimes the static is more pleasant than the words we actually hear...

if we listen carefully enough, the background noise might lull us to sleep nicely...

i live in the woods...but when i drive my road back towards town...lots of waves...causes a smile...

will the real jonathan livingston seagull please stand up!

nice calligraphy...

| Posted on 2012-04-19 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
  I love to read poems in the poet''s handwriting; and with yours it is easy because it has calligraphic beauty.

Full of seagulls called Jonathan, eh?
| Posted on 2012-04-19 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]

i should imagine that there must be much worse places than morelli’s gelato to count ships. i have never been there, but in my imagination, i see it very similar in atmosphere, to nardini's of largs.

i am also a traveller, and i hope to always be waving , not drowning when those captains pass me by. either waving or soaring up in the clouds with jonathan.

| Posted on 2012-04-18 00:00:00 | by Alter idem | [ Reply to This ]

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