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    dots Submission Name: liesdots
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    Author: gwenn sundala
    Elite Ratio:    3.71 - 76/70/51
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Rant/Depressed
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       had a lot of major changes in my life the past two years. it finally broke me. in the midst of my mental breakdown, these words came to me as i tried writing things out to calm myself......


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    dotsliesdots
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    at a loss for words, don't know what to say
    i didn't think things would end this way
    you told me i mattered, you told me you cared
    and now i just sit at the window and stare
    you stole and broke my heart
    you're tearing me apart
    i'm losing my mind
    i'm done with you're lies

    just leave me alone
    don't mess with me anymore
    you're out in the cold
    i've kicked you out the door....




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      The main difference is that you fought back and come out of this brokenness.
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