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    dots Submission Name: Muteddots
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    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 137/245/159
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsMuteddots
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    So long ago that Iíve been muted,
    Dead weight of seas against my mouth,
    Should I let loose the Krackenís shoulders,
    So manifold in their unspoken vows,

    to all but stooping gradients
    that press into the glass
    night sky, its chill,
    permissively grandiloquent,
    and tremble on the verge
    of sullied love?

    So silence me then, draw on
    your withdrawn courage,
    Once,
    twice!
    So what if we both of us
    were
    painstakingly mistaken?




    Submitted on 2012-04-19 17:17:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Nearly everybody has a poem about disappointing love!

    I like the poem. Just going to read your other posts.

    Siberia??
    | Posted on 2012-04-19 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]


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