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Nearing storm


Author: Priyaa
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Nearing storm



A storm is nearing me,
To hit me down,
Break my heart, and
End my world.
The Earth is getting dark
Darker than the midnight sky.
My eyes searched,
In that never ending desert,
A place to hide,
Until it is over.
Oh ! I'm hit to the ground,
By a sudden robust wind.
Streaks of perpetual lightning,
Ran through my face.
Stars are falling down
Like fireballs, and
The ground is burning
Like lava fields.
I closed my eyes, frightened
And yelled for help.
My hands reached out,
To get hold of something
So that I can stand on my feet
And run somewhere.
I want to live,
In this beautiful Earth.
I want to see again the sunrise,and
The shining sky at night.
I want to walk in the rain
And fly with the birds.
Oh ! I'm helpless,
I'm still on the Earth
No hands came, to
bring me back to life.
We are born and died alone,
But I was alone in my entire life.
I cried as loud as I can,
Thinking about my loses.
Tears came followed by blood,
A last go-back to my memories,
To the faces I relied upon,
To the eyes that promised to care me
To the hearts that promised to love me,
And I closed my eyes,
Forever.




Submitted on 2012-04-21 22:20:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Hi.. I loved the way u wrote it.
Very expressive..
Exact way of linking depression with a storm..pretty cool..highly talented..
Go on.. gud luck..
| Posted on 2012-04-21 00:00:00 | by chilly | [ Reply to This ]


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