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    dots Submission Name: Porcelaindots

    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    3.95 - 139/254/170
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Did spring miscarriage, thrown away
    to the indignant hammock sky, its pledges
    torn to pieces of unsent postcards -
    once stealing kisses between the blinking lights;
    a disappearing act of flying Russian circus;
    but now mismatched and tainted?
    How easy it was for you to take the sidewalk
    on the other side of the city
    and start bargaining your own future
    devotion to other people’s suffering -
    stamping out the almond blossoms;
    discard me
    like an old porcelain doll
    you no longer

    Submitted on 2012-04-22 08:02:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i really like several of the images in this.."the indignant hammock sky"

    "stamping out the almond blossoms"

    we had a spring---we were an "us"

    two seasons that melded together..now we walk on sidewalks at opposite ends of the city...how did that happen?

    reminds me of living in the same town with exes...

    "spring miscarried"

    supposed to have borne a summer---instead...it is barren and cold like a winter.

    | Posted on 2012-04-22 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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