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nothing but a whisper


Author: darkonesgirl
ASL Info:    21/f/sc
Elite Ratio:    3.32 - 233 /245 /125
Words: 132
Class/Type: Poetry /The pain inside
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So really depressed last night and instead of doing something stupid this came to be


nothing but a whisper



Slice my wrist
And watch me bleed
One drop at a time
Red scarlet running down my arm
Just like the tears
Running down my face
My hearts been ripped out
Shredded and torn apart
When I needed you the most
You walked away from me
Left me all alone
to cry in the dark
Screaming out your name
Till I can't whisper
one day you will miss me
And when that day comes
I may already be gone
And it will be to late
So now my floor
Is stained red as well
The world grows fuzzy
Sounds become distant
Finally the pain starts to recead
One final time
I whisper I love you
As I slip into the void
Finally after years of hurt
I come to know peace




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