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    dots Submission Name: nothing but a whisperdots
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    Author: darkonesgirl
    ASL Info:    21/f/sc
    Elite Ratio:    3.32 - 233/245/125
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
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    Description:
       So really depressed last night and instead of doing something stupid this came to be


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    dotsnothing but a whisperdots
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    Slice my wrist
    And watch me bleed
    One drop at a time
    Red scarlet running down my arm
    Just like the tears
    Running down my face
    My hearts been ripped out
    Shredded and torn apart
    When I needed you the most
    You walked away from me
    Left me all alone
    to cry in the dark
    Screaming out your name
    Till I can't whisper
    one day you will miss me
    And when that day comes
    I may already be gone
    And it will be to late
    So now my floor
    Is stained red as well
    The world grows fuzzy
    Sounds become distant
    Finally the pain starts to recead
    One final time
    I whisper I love you
    As I slip into the void
    Finally after years of hurt
    I come to know peace




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