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    dots Submission Name: Promise Ringdots
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    Author: hybridsongwrite
    ASL Info:    20 / M / MN, USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.82 - 185/163/68
    Words: 182
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Passion
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    dotsPromise Ringdots
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    Hush my love, now please don't cry
    I promise it will be alright
    Close your eyes, and get some sleep
    I'll be back home in about a week
    And as you dream, i'm there in mind
    To hold you close and call you mine

    chorus:
    I promise you you'll have my hand
    I promise you everything i am
    I promise you this where i stand
    I'll be there with you once again

    The distance is far, but i'm not gone
    Even though it must seem like so long
    I know it's wrong, but i'll make it right
    When i'm there and look in your eyes
    And you see that i wrote you this song
    To show you that this is where i belong

    Way back when, how could we have known
    That you'd be the one that i was meant to hold
    Your hand is cold but it will be warm
    When i hold you close like i have before
    And i do something more to let you know
    That your arms are where i call my home




    Submitted on 2012-04-22 14:41:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      the love you have for your significant other pours out of your heart through these beautiful words. a tear came to my eye as it brought to mind the one i care for myself. beautifully done, very moving.
    | Posted on 2012-04-23 00:00:00 | by gwenn sundala | [ Reply to This ]


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