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    dots Submission Name: Apologydots
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    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    26/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 136/243/156
    Words: 56
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsApologydots
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    And maybe there’s still an oak for us
    in a deserted field, dropping mosaics
    of shadow and light into my open palm
    amidst the rushed whisperings
    of adolescent summers,
    and that would be the only
    cry of lost and shattered worlds
    against the battered shutter:
    catching the last of straying sunsets
    into your bleeding
    eye.




    Submitted on 2012-04-22 16:13:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i see this as a companion piece for porcelain...
    well....i may be off...but apologies are too late...

    or are they?

    your bleeding eye...

    maybe it is not the speaker's apology, but the significant other's..

    sorry to have treated you like a discarded doll, and maybe we could get the dreams back...

    oh well, probably the incurable romantic in me...seeing reconciliation.

    but i really like both pieces...and i like your endings...you build a certain crescendo in your pieces, and then hit the climax well at the very end.

    you leave the poems open to interpretation...yet the closings don't just hang there...they are tight and sharp.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-04-22 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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