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    dots Submission Name: sweet girldots
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    Author: shockking
    ASL Info:    36/m/MI
    Elite Ratio:    3.9 - 8/11/4
    Words: 28
    Class/Type: Limerick/Comedy
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    dotssweet girldots
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    There lived a sweet girl in the woods,
    she struggled with shouldn'ts and shoulds,
    she hunted for food, delightfully nude,
    showing off all her bads and her goods.




    Submitted on 2012-04-23 18:43:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hah! Clever. The rhythm of the meter works great here.
    | Posted on 2012-04-24 00:00:00 | by saartha | [ Reply to This ]
      last line i would make..."showing off her bads and goods"

    keeps the tight flow...and preserves the humorous angle better....


    guess the "shoulds" won out.


    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-04-23 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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