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    dots Submission Name: This is a poem written by my brother Liamdots
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    Author: Wonderwords
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    Words: 260
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       This poem was written by my brother when his wife left him with his two daughters. He sees his daughters regularly now and has remarried but was very heartbroken when his first marriage broke up.


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    dotsThis is a poem written by my brother Liamdots
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    "brilliant poem by liam
    Time to say Goodbye
    Ahh, where the heart lies no-body knows.
    "Time to say goodbye"
    plays, with its happy sad airs,
    happy and sad..
    goodbye to what?
    Its time to say goodbye.
    When the jeep and trailer calls,
    the blood in your body rusts,
    its slows,
    you sweat,
    you fear,
    your heart beats slowly.
    light fades and your heart hides,
    you cant't feel it in your chest.
    Your airless scream is never heard,
    like a hero dying in slow motion
    your heart falls down,
    hiding,
    lost,
    gone.
    It rushes to behind your eyes
    no.. further than the back of your head.
    You know where it is,
    the anger rises,
    the landscape turns pink,
    you light a trembling cigarette with paralysed hands,
    you realise your heart has hid again,
    gone to below.
    As the rust rasps
    and chugs to your lungs,
    just enough
    to feebly cry
    time to say goodbye.
    Just enough
    time to say goodbye
    gone,
    below,
    hiding,
    below,
    you know where the big big sobs come from,
    the real ones,
    there,
    below.
    Death could not be worse,
    than this empty,evil, forsaken agony.
    Just like I believe Jesus felt before He died,
    time to say goodbye,
    even then He did not give up,
    He just died,
    heartbroken.
    Is this what it means to be
    heartbroken,
    time to say goodbye.
    Change the record,
    they are gone.
    Au Revoir, til we meet again.
    The hero rises,
    bloodied, battered,
    broken,
    heart beating,
    til we meet again,
    chance,
    hope and light,
    rising.
    thats right
    time to say goodbye.
    "




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