[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav

  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav

    << | >>

    dots Submission Name: This is a poem written by my brother Liamdots

    Author: Wonderwords
    Elite Ratio:    2.13 - 15/24/25
    Words: 260
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 891
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1923

       This poem was written by my brother when his wife left him with his two daughters. He sees his daughters regularly now and has remarried but was very heartbroken when his first marriage broke up.

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsThis is a poem written by my brother Liamdots

    "brilliant poem by liam
    Time to say Goodbye
    Ahh, where the heart lies no-body knows.
    "Time to say goodbye"
    plays, with its happy sad airs,
    happy and sad..
    goodbye to what?
    Its time to say goodbye.
    When the jeep and trailer calls,
    the blood in your body rusts,
    its slows,
    you sweat,
    you fear,
    your heart beats slowly.
    light fades and your heart hides,
    you cant't feel it in your chest.
    Your airless scream is never heard,
    like a hero dying in slow motion
    your heart falls down,
    It rushes to behind your eyes
    no.. further than the back of your head.
    You know where it is,
    the anger rises,
    the landscape turns pink,
    you light a trembling cigarette with paralysed hands,
    you realise your heart has hid again,
    gone to below.
    As the rust rasps
    and chugs to your lungs,
    just enough
    to feebly cry
    time to say goodbye.
    Just enough
    time to say goodbye
    you know where the big big sobs come from,
    the real ones,
    Death could not be worse,
    than this empty,evil, forsaken agony.
    Just like I believe Jesus felt before He died,
    time to say goodbye,
    even then He did not give up,
    He just died,
    Is this what it means to be
    time to say goodbye.
    Change the record,
    they are gone.
    Au Revoir, til we meet again.
    The hero rises,
    bloodied, battered,
    heart beating,
    til we meet again,
    hope and light,
    thats right
    time to say goodbye.

    Submitted on 2012-04-23 19:29:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!

    ||| Comments |||

    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?


    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Whiteout written by layDsayD
    Cosmic Dreams written by Chelebel
    Bee Keeper written by endlessgame23
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Every..... written by jackz
    Fasade written by jackz
    Sunset written by rev.jpfadeproof
    written by Daniel Barlow
    AI written by poetotoe
    Waiting written by Daniel Barlow
    Blood Stains Are The Worst written by ForgottenGraves
    Happy Saint Patrick's Day written by poetotoe
    PEARL (Exclusive Poem) 10th Anniversary... written by Cordell
    Red Barn written by rev.jpfadeproof
    new moon written by CrypticBard
    the living moment written by ShyOne
    Push written by JanePlane
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (7) written by endlessgame23
    Estranged / Shocks written by Daniel Barlow
    It's Night Now written by RisingSon
    4th of July written by layDsayD
    Sleep Talk written by Queen_of_spades
    Primitive Lapse written by Crestfallenman
    The Song on Your Guitar written by SavedDragon
    You do, I Do written by poetotoe
    What happens written by Wolfwatching
    Pain, an elixir. written by Ramneet
    Or are we written in the sand? written by Chelebel
    written by Daniel Barlow
    The Severed Head written by HisNameIsNoMore




    User Name:


    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]

    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]

    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]