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    dots Submission Name: my terror, i can't forecast dots

    Author: pioneerheart
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    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsmy terror, i can't forecast dots

    She's all grown up
    Yet, she trembles
    As she crumbles as a war,torn tower,but, your parry is so skillful so fearless
    Desperately, tried to disassemble the coming
    Of your kingly, presence
    I can only wonder, how in God's name
    Can heaven shower on me now?
    For, I'm broken down
    Like a sun through clouds
    This might just be another forecast of violent weather.
    I cannot tell, like before...I used to be clever.

    Submitted on 2012-04-24 01:19:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      But in every storm, comes its black cloud, and every black cloud comes with its silver lining. I hate when you get caught up in a storm, and seem to dislike it more when the storm is ahead of us. If anything, we can predict, we can break its patterns, but every storm has its potential to knock us harder off our feet before we can hold our self from falling. That person who is around you, or entity for it could be, seems to drag you down, and your words describe how hard you work on preventing this from happening. Our heavens sometimes do get torn away, but I think, at least I'm learning, that our lives can be better if we do not follow its patterns, when that episode does follow.

    Hang in there...Even when it is the hardest thing to do. And please keep writing, I'm enjoying your posts
    | Posted on 2012-04-24 00:00:00 | by Crestfallenman | [ Reply to This ]

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