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    dots Submission Name: Maudlin dots
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    Author: Dead Bell
    ASL Info:    23/m/Ire
    Elite Ratio:    2.42 - 48/129/125
    Words: 203
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsMaudlin dots
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    The chipper van and its tubs of curry
    scenting out low in the air
    of the Golden Anchors’ playground

    The cowshed across from the farm
    with the barking dogs
    held the warm mist of cow shit

    Striking matches in the car park
    letting one ruin the rest
    all flame at once, our Chinese trick

    My mother explaining the tracks of age
    she gave me her hand
    skin cracking with time; roads into mine

    The surf, the cliffs and the whirlpool at Clone
    still holding the art in all I do.
    Tommy’s sandy shop so full of youth

    Where all the voices, even whispered, were familiar
    and rose from the shaded laneway
    past the dusty barks of crab apple trees

    In the days of the Punt
    chocolate cigarettes and candy sticks.
    hay-stuffed Cornetto joints

    Friday night might resolve us to
    The Orphan Girl or foamy Beacon,
    wet romances or frighting blows.

    Afterwards we'd find our girls
    shiver out and give them hope
    feel the rush of the harbors gale

    Find our bus and signal home




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      Not maudlin at all but filled with life's pleasant frivolities, the stuff of frolic & bliss. Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2013-01-26 00:00:00 | by CrypticBard | [ Reply to This ]


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