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    dots Submission Name: A Brief Story of My Adolescence Through Filmdots
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    Author: The Wolverine
    ASL Info:    23/M/MA
    Elite Ratio:    4.51 - 74/137/91
    Words: 146
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
    Total Views: 816
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    Description:
       I'd like to WORK ON LINE BREAKS or possiblly turn it into a prose or lineated peom 3 or 4 line stanzas. I want to make it tighter.


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    dotsA Brief Story of My Adolescence Through Filmdots
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    I hid under the bed
    While big brother watched a Stallone movie in Mom and Dadís room
    He knew I was there but didnít kick me out
    My first R-rated experience, under 17 unaccompanied by a parent
    No apparent trauma or lasting damage from the viewing of Judge Dredd

    My father said I was not to repeat a single word
    I heard during South Park: Bigger, Longer, & Uncut
    But I couldnít keep that promise.

    NC-17, what does that mean?
    Showgirls changed Saved By The Bell.
    Well, I wasnít ready for that one, but it was done.
    My mouth stayed shut this time.

    I rewind the tape of memory
    Select scenes on my mindís DVD (expand this)
    At the theater or our den.

    Revisit the stubs in my collection
    Exhaling as I cap my lenses
    And play them all again.




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