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    dots Submission Name: Whispers Through The Asylum Ventsdots
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    Author: DearlyDeparted
    Elite Ratio:    3.33 - 211/290/189
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
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       It's just been one of those days...


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    dotsWhispers Through The Asylum Ventsdots
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    I've got to write out this mess.
    To somehow allow this stress off my chest.
    It's insane how this rage;
    Leaves me feeling like a junkie slave.
    A demonic presence no amount of sage can cleanse.
    Busted knuckles no doctor would attempt to mend.
    Blood shot eyes no amount of drops can clear.
    Screams so Earth shattering the Goddess' can hear.
    A sensation that of razor wire scrapping across alabaster bone.
    Leaving my mouth spitting venom to myself alone.
    Yet there's a sense of euphoric bliss;
    That makes me wonder if this insanity would be something I'd miss.




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