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    dots Submission Name: Moving Timedots
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    Author: AtrophyEmpathos
    ASL Info:    19 M California
    Elite Ratio:    4.39 - 45/55/29
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsMoving Timedots
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    Time to move along,
    Time to get moving.
    Pack up everything
    And say goodbye.

    This is it.
    This is all I never wanted.

    But it has come to this
    And now I hold your body,
    Dead in my arms,
    Draped in the angelic
    Hues of memory.

    Helpless yet to breathe,
    And crushed under the weight of your
    Crumbling glory;
    The sad death of fantasy.
    This is all I never wanted.




    Submitted on 2004-08-02 03:16:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      LOL. Spooky! :) Thanks for the comments anyway. Yes you're right, someone I 'idolized' got married. Stupid,really,'coz the person's sort of a celebrity and doesn't even know me. :) Laughed at myself for being silly after writing it.
    | Posted on 2004-08-02 00:00:00 | by Maverique | [ Reply to This ]


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