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    dots Submission Name: Sweet Sarrow and Shadow Lillysdots
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    Author: Mr.Ordinary
    ASL Info:    21/M/Navy
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 64/102/41
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 729
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    Description:
       my usual poor formatting and nonsence, just getting it off my mind


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    dotsSweet Sarrow and Shadow Lillysdots
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    A shade so dark, so perfect, so pure
    A beauty so bright, so flawed, so broken

    I've allways wondered of these things
    The want, the need, the search

    I've desired a shadow lilly for so long
    I almost dont know who I am

    But at last here I am
    Shadow lilly in my hand

    All I feel is sarrow
    Sarrow of meeting the end

    The End





    Submitted on 2012-04-27 11:35:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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