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A moment in the life of time

Author: Temidayo
ASL Info:    29 male Nigeria-lagos
Elite Ratio:    8 - 161 /40 /20
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Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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time as it passes

A moment in the life of time

Night has bled the day's open sores,
that made us a pitiable sight all week long.
If it were'nt for the speedy hours we might have died 31 more times by the months's close.
Thankfully we dont seek closure from one long gone & dead like the memories of 52,if we considered every week of last yr.
However upon healing fantasies of all we missed out on besiege our consciousness thus leaving us in a state of mounting optimism for time to come.

Submitted on 2012-04-28 01:12:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like the way this swings and was particularly drawn to the title. "besiege our consciousness" is a nice phrase.
| Posted on 2012-04-30 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]

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