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    dots Submission Name: Love Beyonddots
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    Author: Anneboleyn707
    ASL Info:    18/Female/Pennsylvania
    Elite Ratio:    3.96 - 44/84/67
    Words: 38
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsLove Beyonddots
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    By: Jamie Redlawsk

    I felt love with my five foot frame:
    The smooth skin of cupid
    Prancing towards his happy ending;
    The golden sheen of a heartís capacity
    To love beyond reason,
    Or reciprocity.




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      How true that love is beyond reason, or the need to reciprocate.

    What I am a little stuck on is cupid prancing towards "his ending"... do you mean his happy ending for you and your partner, or cupid's demise (because I always seem to think if Cupid does too well, he will put himself out of a job). Sorry, my mind just wanders a little on this point. the wording to me feels more like a means to an end than actually fitting (but that could just be my current state of mind, rather than anything to do with your own writing).

    I DO however, very much love the begining. Bringing the idea that love is felt as a whole body experience, rather than just in the mind (or the heart).
    | Posted on 2012-04-29 00:00:00 | by eowyn | [ Reply to This ]


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