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    dots Submission Name: Unrequited dots
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    Author: isis_lenore
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    dotsUnrequited dots
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    From the corner of my eye I peek
    As you walk into the room and I
    Hold my breath waiting, wanting you
    To be able to come to my table
    And embrace me like I desire.
    But instead, as I exhale I watch
    You walk on by.


    You smile as you pass, as if we
    Were old friends, from way back
    But still you walk past me.
    You don’t stop.


    Perhaps, later I will see you
    In passing some dark hall or
    Side street and you will reach
    Out for me, to stall me
    Just for a moment
    To smile, to explain, to exclaim…


    But I will walk on by.







    Submitted on 2012-04-28 20:26:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is an enjoyable and infinite muse...
    life has many "passing bys" , leaving many "what ifs" and missed opportunities...

    thanks for sharing!
    | Posted on 2012-05-01 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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