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    dots Submission Name: Handful of Thornsdots

    Author: simpleandgreen
    Elite Ratio:    1.8 - 39/141/136
    Words: 222
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsHandful of Thornsdots

    You are a rose,
    So beautiful, so inviting.
    You satin petals reach out with love
    And comfort, it's enticing.

    You are carefree,
    You blow with the breeze,
    You're mature and in your prime,
    Filled with languidity and ease.

    At least that's what I thought,
    Untill I reached out to hold you,
    Taking aback, with a handful of thorns,
    You're not the person I once knew.

    Yes, you're red, but not lovely,
    You're like the blood running from my hand,
    Streaking my skin, making me cry, you just
    Throw in more salt and sand.

    I snap your stem and find
    That you're very hideous inside,
    Not a beauty, but a beast,
    Under this mask of beauty you hide.

    What made you a rotting blossom,
    Some events in your life?
    What made you think it's okay,
    To taunt me with that knife

    You call a tounge,
    You're such a damn bully,
    You take over this entire garden,
    I'll never understand fully,

    Why you hog the sunlight and water,
    When you're time is almost up.
    I'm snow white m'am,
    A new blosson in town, that's what's up!

    And I'm not taking this shit anymore,
    It's my turn to shine.
    You're last petal is falling,
    Deal with it bitch, you're all out of time.

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      Yes, yes, yes! Those thorny roses of our lives just pricks us a little too much, then before they know it, they petals are withering and its too late for them. Very powerful indeed..

    | Posted on 2012-05-06 00:00:00 | by TangledInDreams | [ Reply to This ]
      You go girl! This is a very powerful piece and very well written.

    God Bless,
    | Posted on 2012-04-30 00:00:00 | by lynn7 | [ Reply to This ]

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