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    dots Submission Name: Illusiondots
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    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    26/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    4.04 - 136/243/154
    Words: 63
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsIllusiondots
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    My picture frame keeps changing
    the watercolours off the wall,
    and maybe we are not good together
    but even worse apart,
    scraping butterflies
    into knotted
    half-hearts.

    And maybe my stomach is already
    spoken for, confusing enthusiasm
    for brewings of the winter storm,
    sweeping off its followers
    so that no one would ever
    get close enough
    to know.




    Submitted on 2012-04-29 16:41:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I still like butterflies :)
    but I'd add a color to that bug
    I like the stomach as opposed to the heart thing
    it seems deeper
    conveys an altogether different feeling
    | Posted on 2012-05-02 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      this reminded me of me for so many years...a half heart with half-hearted attempts of love...


    enthusiasm for relationships just a brewing for a winter storm.---i had enough winter storms...

    ran the other way...

    i especially like the second stanza and the last three lines...i'm a little overdone with the butterfly imagery...nevertheless...a really good read.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-04-30 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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