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    dots Submission Name: Full Coursedots
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    Author: Blue Monk
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    Words: 197
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    I look into the well at depth
    and see some branches burning
    the thin and small they flare so bright
    the sparks do fly to my delight
    but quickly pass as day to night
    cinders to glow and smoke to flow
    ere all their ashes fall

    I look into the well and see
    the body of a once great tree
    that fell to such a dismal depth
    it's witnessed by a single star
    that's up above so very far
    where broken limbs once heaven sought
    now watch their children die

    I look into the well to peer
    at days to pass when embers fade
    and vision passes into shade
    that grows into the darkest night
    yet keeping watch yon single star
    which watches which, is it the well
    through which the denizens of hell
    are yearning?

    I look into the well and sigh
    dare I to meet them eye to eye
    and guess upon a moot to meet
    should I not bring something to eat
    perhaps some wine to satisfy
    the red of course, flagons for all
    each lowered by a silken thread
    to honor fates which may prevail
    so therein rests our tale




    Submitted on 2012-05-02 01:35:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      A good read, Lloyd! I enjoyed this odd rhyme scheme.

    Oddly, it felt like Middle Earth to me...
    the great tree of Gondor, dead in its fountain
    and the word moot is forever linked in my mind to Treebeard, harumphing through Fangorn forest...


    of course, this probably means nothing in relation to the theme of your poem.

    | Posted on 2012-05-18 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]
      Something worth imagining.Something worth imagining. Is this well hellfire. The lone star heaven? To bring water to those with patched thirst. Those who never thought they would wind up there. Well that what i got at first readin
    | Posted on 2012-05-06 00:00:00 | by Temidayo | [ Reply to This ]
      and who will bring the appetizer?

    you are so smooth with your phrasing, as always...

    looking into the well i see me...someone who has fallen from great heights to great depth...

    i get an Oedipus feeling here...great wealth and power cannot protect us, we are all vulnerable to fall...and we need always to look into the abyss and realize that we can fall into it at any time---

    are they watching us? or are we watching them?

    good question.

    and now----

    what's for dessert?

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-05-02 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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