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    dots Submission Name: These Late Stepsdots
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    Author: Crestfallenman
    ASL Info:    24/M/CA
    Elite Ratio:    4.45 - 622/961/454
    Words: 188
    Class/Type: Misc/Longing
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       It's one of those nights that are trying to get to me. I'll accomplish this, as long as I try I know...It just feels good to vent this out.


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    dotsThese Late Stepsdots
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    I see myself in my past,
    In the innocence that I longed.

    I've looked into nothingness far too long,
    Not knowing in the world what is going on.

    I've come to believe my soul has fallen,
    Fallen so far away from my grips.

    All the pieces of me are falling everywhere,
    But I'm fighting my hardest to glue myself
    Glue myself together.

    Pieces are to hard to find,
    Some lay impossible to be placed together.
    Priority in the matter, seems no need,
    Heavy enough, it nearly destroys me.

    I fight myself through this every day,
    My life is not this fucked up,
    All of this you made me believe,
    But starting to learn.

    I know I can fight the storm,
    You do your best at convincing me that I'm so ill,
    That all of this around me is not what it seems.

    But I know better,
    I'm felt both differences.
    You can't hold me forever, my steps will wander,
    I'm fighting so hard...

    I'm fighting to learn....
    I'm fighting to love...
    I'm fighting to move on in this life.




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      No one lives in the same reality, each has his own subjective biases, his own canvas and medium upon which each world is painted. If something is real to you then it is real to you even if another dimension from the general consensus. That's it, live your world, but adopt consensus. At least when dealing with other people. Otherwise we're worlds apart.

    As to the soul, at least you have one. Some people do not believe in such, imagine that. I think the trick is to find where you soul's happy place resides and meet it there from time to time.

    On a positive note, I think I am making progress with my guitar playing. I have a purple Ibanez stratocaster knockoff. I'm picking up a one hour lesson once a week and then trying to find time to practice. Today's was kind of fun. Long way to go though, long way to go.
    | Posted on 2012-05-02 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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