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Patience


Author: MysterydarkPoet
ASL Info:    20/f/Aust
Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 157 /295 /173
Words: 124
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Patience


Patience- a missing virtue
& one that held the key
To light the fire to spark my heart
& ignite my love eternally

Blinded & heavy hearted
I didn't count on you-
It's like you burst open the door
& lit up the dark- 
Released my love, & let it flood out

But it was my heart,
Not my eyes,
That saw you- 
It locked on your course
& drew me into you

Like a weighted anchor
You're bound & chained to my heart
With a life sentence in heaven of
Til death do us part

It's like i'd jump out of a lifeboat
Just to drown with you at sea
While quietly wishing every moment
Would last an eternity.




Submitted on 2012-05-03 06:06:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i think you meant "you're bound and chained to my heart"

i really like the last stanza...the commitment to the relationship that came along and lit the match.

reminds me of springsteen..."you can't start a fire without a spark"

and yet...often we cannot go out and search for the spark...it just has to come along...but when it does ....we know it..and we feel the heat---

i really like this piece

jacob
| Posted on 2012-05-03 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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