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    dots Submission Name: Just Plain Dirtdots
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    Author: Darkwarrior
    ASL Info:    27
    Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 60/63/33
    Words: 170
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsJust Plain Dirtdots
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    You lay your feet upon me,
    unaware.
    So you shake off your boots
    vigorously,
    but you just cant rid me.
    I am dirt,
    in a puddle of tears.
    You track me around your fine Persian rug,
    with no care.
    Your heartless body you bare,
    and yet still
    my filth lies there.
    Nonexistent in your eyes,
    no time to realize
    the pain I try and share.
    I am everywhere now,
    in every nook &cranny.
    You can hardly notice,
    I blend in perfectly,
    a subtle shade of gray.
    And as you trample your feet upon me,
    numerously,
    ever so carelessly,
    my pity
    it spreads.
    Every aspect of your life,
    I lay beneath you.
    Drying overtime,
    no tears to nourish me.
    I lie lifelessly.
    I move at every stroke of your step,
    bend at your wish.
    For I am just meer dirt.
    Nothing more,
    nothing less.




    Submitted on 2012-05-04 02:33:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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