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    dots Submission Name: Kind Illusionsdots
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    Author: moaxcym
    ASL Info:    23/m/Pakistan
    Elite Ratio:    2.87 - 155/196/85
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsKind Illusionsdots
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    You say that I am full of contradictions:
    I have delicate wrists, but strong forearms.
    The length of my fingers is perfectly shaped
    To reach out to the crevasses of your soul;
    I enter your little paradise arrogantly
    As if I were god, playing the role of a fiery serpentine.
    And in the end, I only feel my own heartbeat,
    While my ear rests on your breast.




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