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    dots Submission Name: Prayer for the forsakendots
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    Author: TalentedChild
    ASL Info:    17
    Elite Ratio:    1.85 - 19/81/106
    Words: 189
    Class/Type: Poetry/Sorry
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    dotsPrayer for the forsakendots
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    Oh little girl donít cry pretty soon itíll be alright
    For Iíll be in my bedroom praying for you tonight
    See this little girl he puts on his lap is really sad you see
    When her mommy went to heaven she got punished for everything
    He brings in other men for her when he canít do his job
    And they all take turns hitting her and raping her till all their pain is gone
    While they smell of booze and cheap perfume they need someone to use
    , but they donít know sheís just a little girl who can be hurt too.
    Sheís locked in her room, and chained to the bed, fighting to survive
    how will she make it through this if no one is by her side?
    However, pretty soon my prayers will be answered and her God will guide her through it all
    Because sometimes little girls need a motherís guidance before they can stand up tall.
    Then, no longer will she cry at night, and soon she will be saved,
    While everyone is looking up at her and kneeling at the flowers on her grave.




    Submitted on 2012-05-06 13:18:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Dam girl that was rough, and to think the sexual abuse I endured was diffcult.

    Jackz
    | Posted on 2012-05-09 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]


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